Maya cemia

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zdraztvouite!
(izvinite, I don't know how to write in Russian with the Latin alphabet, and I didn't yet figure out my keyboard.. so I'll stick to English).

Behind the lj-cut, I have put a text that I composed for Russian class (First year; level 2).
It is about my family (hope you can figure that one out; if not, then my Russian must be really bad).

Technically, I need 15 sentences. I have 20. I was wondering if it was possible to rephrase some sentences and remove some ona and on (highlighted in yellow); I find I use them too often.

Also, I'd like to know if I put the accents at the right places. If ever I did a mistake concerning that, please let me know, because this text is for a recording, so I need to be able to say the words as they sound.

One last thing: for some words, I wasn't sure how to translate them (Parol officer and Fashion designer); if you could let me know what is the correct formula, that would be wonderful!



Here's the translation in English:

I have a big family: I have two brothers and one sister.

My mother's name is Anna. She was born in Ivory Coast, but she is French. She is a maid.

My father's name is Peter. He was born in Drummond, New Brunswick (in Canada). He is a parol officer.

My oldest brother's name is Eric. He lives in Edmonton, Alberta. He is 25 years old. He works in a mill. His girlfriend's name is Marie.

My younger brother's name is Daniel. He is 21 years old. He finished college a few months ago. He wants to be an engineer.

Finally, my sister's name is Helen. She is 16 years old. She is in high school. She wants to be a fashion designer.

Thanks a lot for any constructive feedback! ^_^
EMPER

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Oh, I just figured out something. For the first one, I wrote genetive thinking about negation. -Now- I understand my mistake..