I fixed whatever I could...

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

Well, the people that saw my previous post commented about my mistakes, so as a good student I am trying to be, I fixed them all:

http://leakingbucket.livejournal.com/2113.html

If there are still some mistakes, please tell me and correct if you have the time, thank you in advance. ^_^

p.s


I also rewrote all the posts that were written in translit, so I would be really happy, if you read them (its 3 short posts), and point out my mistakes. : )

Comments

[ksenia2005.livejournal.com]

Ты понимаешь[,] что ты по-настоящему счастлива

человек[,] который тебя любит

только чтоб как то - I would say только для того, чтобы как[-]то

улуч[ш]ить = to make better, улучить has another meening (улучить минутку — to find a minute, to spare a minute)

что рядом со [] мной [] существует - "со мной" hyphen not needed (= with me); comma not needed

человек[,] который

[woody-woodpeker.livejournal.com]

Well

улучить - smth like "find" or "catch"
If you meen "making better" - улучшить (лучший)

then
со мной, not "со-мной" (you just don't need "-" - "со" и "мной" are two different words
but
как-то, not "как то", "то" is a part of word

About commas:
Ты понимаешь, (end of main sentence) что ты...

Here I'm not really sure - but we hane rule about "то" - with it we use less commas.
только тогда, когда в то время как ты


человек, который - "который" is usually opening of sentence, so there must be comma) - in two places in the text

P.S you may tell me about my mistakes)))

[oryx_and_crake]

You should put the comma after "счастлива", otherwise the meaning is different:
"счастлива только тогда, когда" means you are happy only when a certain fact occurs, and "ты понимаешь, что счастлива, только тогда, когда..." means that you realize this only when this occurs.

Besides, you can remove some unnecessary words from this sentence and make the structure more simple and straightforward:
Ты понимаешь, что по-настоящему счастлива, когда у тебя ужасное настроение, и человек который тебя любит, посылает вот такую смску:

[oryx_and_crake]

and yes, you need a comma before который

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

Thank you all guys, and by the way, you could just reply in my journal like many other did next time, I will just read it quicker, but if its more comfortable for you to answer here, its ok as well. ^^