I just wrote a post in Russian for the first time in my life.

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

Few days ago, I posted a question here, about what is the best way to learn to write in Russian, mainly, people just told me to start... so I did, and this is: 
http://leakingbucket.livejournal.com/2113.html
the result!!!
which I have spent on 30 mins, I want you to know that this is my first time writing what so ever in Russian (though I do know it fluently, and can read quite good as I said in my last post.)
I would be really glad if you people tell me what you think about my writing for the first time, correct me, and just comment on the topic.


Thank you all in advance ^_^

Comments

[costes.livejournal.com]

Ты понемаеш как ты понастоящему счастлива - ты понимаешь, что по-настоящему счастлива
прибиваешь - пребываешь
как то улучить - как-то улучшить
В остальном все хорошо. Рада, в вашей жизни есть такой человек)))

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

I am happy as well, and thank you : )

[dinasty.livejournal.com]

Very well in general, just a bit about your spellings (note hyphens as well).

Ты понИмаешЬ, как ты по-настоящему счастлива, только тогда, когда, в то время как ты прЕбЫваешь в ужасном настроениИ, человек, который тебя любит, посылает вот такую смску:
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И прошу заметить, что пошил [I would better say "шил" or "это сшил"] он сам, взяв иголку в руки первый раз в жизни, только чтоб как-то улучШить моё поганое настроение.

Я рада, что около меня существует человек, который умудряется так часто мне напоминать, почему я его так люблю.

Keep going, it is good :)

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

thank you for the corrections. ^^

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

some one just told me this:
[04:58] admin@vahue.org: Да, пиздец.
[04:58] alisa: it cant be that bad OO
[04:59] admin@vahue.org: Орфография - два с минусом. Стилистика еле-еле вытягивает на тройку.
[04:59] alisa: hmmff.
[04:59] admin@vahue.org: Первоклашка и то бы лучше написал.
[04:59] alisa: its like... my first time writing in russian, give me a break o.O
[05:01] admin@vahue.org: Я уж молчу о полной бессмысленности этой порции словесного поноса.
who agrees? xDDD


and another thing,

[05:12] admin@vahue.org: "Ты" употребляется только и только лишь по отношению к кому-то конкретному.
[05:13] alisa: so you cant use it like you use it in english?
[05:14] admin@vahue.org: Вот-вот.
[05:14] alisa: okkkkkkkkk
[05:14] alisa: so if I wrote I,
[05:14] alisa: it would have been ok?

is this true? o.O

[arashi-opera.livejournal.com]

Nonsense. You wrote it quite well, with just a few mistakes. As for the rest, you are not writing a book, are you? Who the hell cares about stylistics? Looks like the person you've spoken to just wanted to offend you. About the use of "ты", it's nonsense as well. You can perfectly use "ты" in Russian the way you did.

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

Great to know, thanks. ^^

[gera.livejournal.com]

The guy is clearly going out of his way to offend you.

Your last two sentences are nearly flawless and they are far from trivial.
And yes, such use of "ты" is acceptable and common in Russian.

[oryx_and_crake]

The person who told you that is a jerk. And the part about "ты" is nonsense as well.

Having said that, the Russian words are usually longer than the English ones, and when you string several clauses in a row, it may sound awkward. Not wrong, but awkward. Next time you write something, try not to follow an English sentence you compose in your head, but break it down into a few simpler ones.

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

I hope that I will have the patience as you did : )

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

If you didnt notice, they did correct my mistakes hun. ^^

Says it all

[gera.livejournal.com]

Interests (http://z01d.livejournal.com/profile): травить изучающих русский иностранцев.

Re: Says it all

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

You can start with giving me milk, I hate it. ^^

Re: Says it all

[gera.livejournal.com]

These are not my interests, just follow the link.
Something tells me this is the same person as in the transcript.

Re: Says it all

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

oh, sorry its 6 am in the morning and I dont really pay that much attention.. ^^
And yeah it is the same person, ^^

Re: Says it all

[gera.livejournal.com]

Well, that's a bit of a consolation. It would be really sad if you met two of the kind in such a short period.

Re: Says it all

[gera.livejournal.com]

By the way, травить in this context doesn't mean to poison, but to harass, to torment.

Re: Says it all

[gera.livejournal.com]

First, the working language of this community is English. You may want to spend some time learning it before trying to harass foreigners, whose Russian is not perfect.
Second, I am sure that pointing out the mistakes and explaining how to correct them would be appreciated. This is not what you are doing and your declared objective is quite different.
Third, a person with such interests should be banned from a community like this and you are lucky I am not the moderator here.

Re: Says it all

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

Well he is an ass, but he did point out my mistakes, if not here then in msn.
He knows russian quite well, but thanks for protecting me and such, its very much appreciated.
Its just not something worth arguing about, and believe me that he is not someone worth arguing with. ^^

Thanks anyways : )

Re: Says it all

[gera.livejournal.com]

There are some things that just drive me mad.
Kicking a learner is like kicking a child. It's easy but abhorrent.
Taking pleasure in it is really perverse. Well, may God or one of the moderators be his judge.

Re: Says it all

[gera.livejournal.com]

Образованных носителей русского языка здесь тысячи. Но в интересы большинства не входит "травить" тех, кто учится. Это не сильно способствует.
Учить иностранный язык - нелегко, большая работа. Вот вы, что показательно, поддержать беседу по-английски не рискнули.

Re: Says it all

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

Well guys, have fun arguing, especially you burp, I am going to study study and study ^^

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[wolk-off.livejournal.com]

That's enough. Good bye.

Re: Says it all

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

huh?

Re: Says it all

[wolk-off.livejournal.com]

That was to the offender :) I banned him from the community.

[firebottle.livejournal.com]

s/которий/которые/ (in title)
s/понемаешь как ты понастоящему/понимаешь, что ты по-настоящему/
s/пошил/сшил/
no comma after "в руки"
s/улучить/улучшить/ (typo?)
no comma after "около меня"

[leakingbucket.livejournal.com]

thanks for the corrections. ^^