Oh no, you probably had a bad teacher, since there isn't written or spoken Russian, there are a bad and well Russian. Well Russian uses all language constructions as well, but it don't simplify nor complicate your speech, so you're well and easily understandable by your audience.
This phrase is ok when you're telling a story in it's development for an auditory. If you break it on several sentences, it will sound as speech for dumbers.